Sorry I Didn't Write This Earlier, But We Gotta Know What Emmet Is Going Through In The Astral Shards

Sorry I didn't write this earlier, but we gotta know what Emmet is going through in the Astral Shards au.. especially after the tags under the sentinels post

Awesome Sneasler ship drawing btw!

Thank you for the ask! This is actually what helped me power through and write the second half to that, so look forward to that.

In reference to the tags-

When Ingo get's Emmet out of the Land of Glass he's not... quite.. natural anymore. He's broken, shattered, literally smashed into tiny pieces that don't properly follow the laws of reality. He physically shouldn't have been able to leave the glass dimension... but Ingo found a way.

The autophage helped with that.

They were familiar with being broken, with being rejected by the Atlas. It was the Void Mother who helped them, who showed them how to use atlantideum to build themselves up from nothing.

But Emmet is a biological being, not mechanical, so they cannot fix him. They can only keep him from falling further apart.

For Ingo to save his brother, he'll need help of an... organic being.

Oops. I dropped off of the face of the earth again.

Whatever. Lady Sneasler but she has spaceship rights.

(This is from my Astral Shards AU! You can read the pitch for it here.)

Obviously it’ll be a while until I post an actual writing update, BUT I’ve got an AU post lined up and almost ready to go, so we’ve got that at least. Maybe next Monday? Look forward to it- it’s long

Tags from @reblog-subway-station:

#woah!! I assume the ship crash and Emmet falling in were the same event or at least connected

Yup yup! They’d run into some nasty pirates while traveling and quickly found themselves out gunned and outmatched. Both of their ships suffered massive damage during the fight, and if they didn’t find a way out of the situation quickly, there was a very real chance they were going to die. So they pulled a Hail Mary.

They entered a black hole.

Now black holes are risky and dangerous- but they are a legitimate form of travel. They could send you to the other side of the galaxy in an instant… but you can't control where exactly and it would seriously damage your ship. Neither Emmet nor Ingo had ever wanted to take those risks, but they were out of options.

It didn’t go well.

(Also, I'm not sure why they're called black holes in game when their function is that of a wormhole???)

#I don't know if it's like that in the game but the glass dimension being purple reminds me of space time distortions #they also remind me of glass domes

You know, I’m not sure how I haven’t made the connection between the distortion world and the land of glass. But you’re totally right that they’re similar!

If I had to guess why, I'd wager it's because the Land of Glass isn't purple... even though the glass itself is.

(The forbidden screenshot)

That’s kinda counterintuitive, but the reasoning for the discrepancy lies behind a part of the AU I haven’t actually mentioned yet:

The Sentinels.

Aka, the antagonists of this AU.

I’ve mentioned a few weeks ago that I’ve got a new AU incoming- and I’m really excited to share it with you! But, as you might have noticed, I currently have way too many projects rn to take on any other fics, so this will have to remain a tumblr only thing for the forceable future.

THAT BEING SAID

I really want this to be an AU people are curious about and want to interact with! Especially if it isn’t leaving tumblr any time soon.

So!

When you got time, do you have any tips on writing Ingo and Emmets dialogue? I really like how you write them but I can't seem to get their speech down. It's mainly Ingos which is annoying since he canonical has more dialogue than Emmet.

Oh thank you!! I’m glad you enjoy- writing these boys dialogue is one of my favorite parts of writing and has made me seriously consider how I write speech for every character I do. It’s been great practice!

Okay, actual advice time lol.

HOW TO WRITE INGO AND EMMET

(According to me, Blue)

(Now, keep in mind that there isn’t one true way to write the boys, and this is just how I personally write them. Take this with a grain of salt)

When you’re first starting out writing the boys I recommend writing dialogue in your own voice and then submasifying it.

For example, let’s take this dialogue and transform it:

“Sorry I’m late for work! My dog chewed through my nice pants so I had to find some new ones! It’s been a bit of a rough day today, not gonna lie.”

So starting with Ingo-

Ingo talks extremely formally and is super long winded. When writing dialogue for him, try to imagine a fancy British butler who uses long words and long sentences. Replace normal words with more “fancy” ones and use more words then you really need to. (A thesaurus can be extremely useful for this)

“My sincerest apologies for my tardy arrival!”

Then, pepper in train terms as much as possible. If he goes three sentences without saying something train related, find a way to stick one in. If you’re stuck, look up a list of train words and take inspiration (I’ll include a list of train expressions I commonly pull from at the bottom of the post) (Make sure to use “Bravo!” and “All aboard!” whenever applicable as well)

“I awoke to the unpleasant surprise of joltik holes in my trousers this morning- which delayed my cab significantly as I was forced to find an undamaged pair!”

I personally strive to use consonants (stuff like I’d, we’ll, don’t) as little as possible with the boys. For Emmet it’s to add to the choppiness of his dialogue and for Ingo it’s because that man would rather use fifty words when one will do. (It also makes them sound more professional!)

“Honestly, after a morning like this one, I pray that the remainder of today’s tracks prove to be much smoother.”

Another thing to keep in mind is that Ingo is extremely polite while Emmet is a bit more blunt. Try to use titles like “sir” and “miss” when writing Ingo- and then just don’t bother with Emmet.

Next up is Emmet, who I personally find much harder then Ingo! Unlike Ingo who’s dialogue you need to add words to, Emmet you need to subtract and simplify! This is the post I originally read to kinda get the jive of things, but here’s my pointers!

First off, figure out what concepts the are being expressed in your sentence, and split those apart.

“Sorry I’m late for work!” has two parts- an apology and an acknowledgment that the person is late. For Emmet we would want to split this single sentence into two.

“I am Emmet! I am late! Sorry!”

Next is vocal ticks! Emmet has several, and they should ideally be sprinkled in sparingly through his dialogue. (You can see that I used ‘I am Emmet’ in the previous section)

‘I am Emmet’ should be used when he is joining a conversation or when he’s about to say something about himself. It CAN be used more then once in a single conversation- but try not to overdo it.

‘Verrrrrrrry’ is another one! Other submas authors have him roll the r on other words as well, but I stick with verrrrrry. This one is easy to use- just extend the word very with extra Rs and use very whenever naturally applicable.

‘Yup’ is one as well- and one I admittedly don’t use often. It rarely jives with the way I write Emmet so I usually don’t bother- but you should definitely keep it in mind!

And of course, train terms! Less often then Ingo of course (since he says less words in general) but if you can find a way to fit it in, go for it.

“The joltiks chewed holes in my pants! Verrrrry naughty. Had to find new pants. Holey pants do not pass safety checks! Yup!”

Finally, the man likes his patterns! When writing Emmet it’s a good idea to have his Blubapedia page open nearby so you can just steal chunks of his script from that. (You can, and should do this for Ingo too!)

“Bad morning. Oh well. Follow the schedule! Everybody smile! All aboard!”

Of course, the man is perfectly capable of speaking longer sentences- but when and where he does so is up to the author.

All that being said, it’s important to remember that you’ll likely have to attempt their dialogue a few times before getting a sentence to flow right. Even for these examples I had to do a couple takes until I found one that really worked!

Here’s a couple of other notes for writing Pokémon characters in general:

Watch out for expressions and words that use animals. (like beeline or ‘in the dog house’) Try to replace those words with their Pokémon counterparts- (such as combeeline [which I’ve typed so many times I’ve started using internally in my day to day life]) or something that sounds close enough (like if your censoring f***, ducklett doesn’t work nearly as good as duck. So try muk instead!)

Do your best to replace religious swears with Pokémon religion! Instead of heavens, or the big G word, use words like, ‘Dragons!’ Or ‘Sweet Swords of Justice!’ (Of course, these are Unovan swears. For Hisui you should be using things like ‘Sinnoh’ and ‘great Time!’. Other regions have their own legendaries as well)

And finally, my list of train terms I pull from regularly!

Cab (or car): To refer to one’s body

“I am afraid my cab is in need of repairs.”

Tracks: A plan or intended route

“Very well! I will follow the tracks you have set!”

Destination: The goal or like, the actual destination

“Bravo! Your talent has brought you to the destination called victory!”

Station (or terminal): A location

“Very well! Let us set our tracks to the Pearl Clan’s station!”

Two Car Train (or three or four or whatever number you need): Friends or a team

“Emmet and I are a two car train!”

Couple (opposite being uncoupled): To join together

“I must ask that you couple your car to mine as we make our way through here. It can get quite dangerous!”

Engine: Another term for your body, but more specifically in regards to energy or drive

“I’m afraid I must rest my engine.”

Refuel: Eat.

“It is getting quite late- let us take a break to refuel.”

Conducting: Guiding

“I look forward to conducting you on this endeavor!”

Derailment (or collision, wreck, trainwreck): Something that has gone wrong.

“Apologies. It appears I have been derailed.”

Unscheduled (opposite being scheduled): Something unexpected

“Ah! A cave in! It appears we must make an unscheduled stop.”

Passenger: Person (or Pokémon)

“It appears we have picked up some unexpected passengers!”

Conductor: Ingo sometimes uses this to refer to himself (works especially well in Hisui)

“Passenger, please refrain from stabbing the conductor”

Delay: Something happening later then scheduled

“Apologies for the delay! Let us begin!”

Sidetracked: put off course

“Ah, but now I have sidetracked us with this talk.”

All aboard!: Good conversation ender 💙

“ALL ABOARD!!!”