Previous Design Of Ghost Gijinka's, Heavily Inspire By Other Design I've Seen On Tumnlr And/or Instagram.

Previous design of Ghost gijinka's, heavily inspire by other design i've seen on tumnlr and/or instagram.

The picture on the left side are my previous gijinka (which again inspired by other gijinka, i think they have tumblr but i forgot their username) and the right side is the new one!!

The hair and eyes are inspired by foileadeux and the elf ears by featherlouise. I really like their elf ears headcannon for higher beings :D

LMAOOO PLZZZ

Why the FUCK is it so fucking bright?

Me me me me!! Im glad i stumbled upon the humans are space orcs when i was reading

"Hoops, strings, and other placebos" by bubblebtch, Hollow knight fanfiction.

I mean like- Mary being the only human in a bug kingdom is a fascinating read to me, learned about the humans are space orcs through the comments section.

Go read the fic btw, its hilarious 100%. I almost binge it on 1 day. 10/10 would read again.

Anyone else who’s really happy that they stumbled upon the humans are weird/humans are space orcs/humans are space australians fantom and now never wants to leave raise your hands!!! I need some more blogs to follow!!!

What are some ways to make stories more detailed and invigorating to read? I am a beginning writer and often times I have very limited dialogue and mediocre descriptions even if what I have in my head is very detailed.

Happy holidays!  Thank you for your question :)

I’m going to say first that your problem, while a very real issue, should be dealt with mainly in the second draft and further.  Details and descriptions aren’t something to worry about until you’ve got the story out – so even if you’re dissatisfied with your descriptive skills right now, keep writing through your scenes!  You can add in description and edit dialogue later.

This is a big question, though, so I’m going to answer the dialogue part of your question and come back in a couple of days with a description post.  Is that okay?

I hope it is, because I’m doin it anyway hurr hurr hurr…

Dialogue Improvement

From what you’ve said in the question, I’m assuming your dialogue is a bit barebones or impersonal – a common issue in modern writing, I’ve noticed.  We see a lot of our favorite characters on TV, and we can tell them apart by their actors’ faces and voices, more than their word choices.  So when we turn to writing fiction, we struggle to keep things unique.  There are a few ways to start changing that, though:

Remember that dialogue and prose have different rules.  While in prose, small words, passive words, and processing terms (like “um”, “well”, “maybe”), are no-nos, they can add to dialogue to make it sound more realistic and audible.  Think about all the natural things we say, which writers are encouraged not to use in their prose and descriptions – and use them, in some places, to improve your dialogue.

Think about which character is speaking.  Write out a list of their most distinctive traits.  If they are humble or introverted, they may speak less or more briefly.  If they are confident or excitable, they may exclaim, exaggerate, or emphasize their speech.  If they are pensive or thoughtful, they may remain quiet for long stretches before speaking in long, eloquent sentences.  Think of these things, and create a cheat sheet for yourself.  For example:

John: boastful, silly, speaks so quickly that his brain struggles to keep up.

Anna: negative, intelligent, speaks when addressed, calming.

Sierra: thoughtful, very funny when she does speak, nervous, stutters.

Abide by “less is more”.  This doesn’t mean that your characters shouldn’t speak, but that you should limit your stretches of dialogue to a few sentences at most.  Monologues and speeches rarely happen in real life.  In fact, it’s rare that all speakers in the conversation go uninterrupted.  Dialogue is best messy, interrupted, and brief – never clean-cut and sterile.

Make your dialogue linear, but not completely.  When you’re writing a long conversation, make sure that nothing comes out of nowhere!  One piece of dialogue, one mention of something, should lead to another.  Even if your character randomly thinks of something (”Oh!  I think I left my scarf at your house!”) it should be prompted by something said previously (”I had to clean up after the party Christmas party last night.”).  This said, however, things shouldn’t be completely Point A -> Point B.  Small topics should branch off between two or more people, and should be dropped and picked back up as is necessary.  Too much of a formula makes your characters into dull boys.

Lastly, a common idea: read your dialogue out loud.  I don’t care if your roommate will hear you.  I don’t care if you’re not an actress.  I don’t give a tiny little damn if you think it’ll take too long.  When reviewing or editing a scene, please, just read it.  I’m not griping at you, anon – I’m griping at all writers.  It’s such an easy thing to do and it improves your dialogue so much, but people just don’t do it!  Why not?  Just do it!

Those are just a few good rules off the top of my head, and if I think of more, I’ll certainly post them.  If none of this is what’s ailing you, then just flick me on the forehead and send me another question.  In a little bit I’ll make another post about description, so look out for that too!

Thanks for your question, and happy writing :)

If you need advice on general writing or fanfiction, you should maybe ask me!

THIS IS SO AWESOME WTF

Ah yes, angst and my character craving parental affection, a little bit of a Stockholm syndrome add into the mix. She kind of having a mental breakdown i guess?? Idk, i just winged it.