BEEZA

BEEZA

Royai, bee movie AU

Roybee screamed “out of my way!” at the waspish intruders, who were gathered menacingly around the body of his beeloved queen.

Beeza lay there before him, her lovely, iridescent wings ripped and lifeless, and Roybee felt his grief attack him with more force than an airborne flip-flop in a human’s hand.

“Beeza, you can’t leave the hive, not yet, we need you,”–he bent to cradle her in his forelegs, his stinger quivering with emotion–“no…I need you…please beelieve me.”

➥ Vocabulary Tips - Adjectives Part 2

⟨Feelings Adjectives⟩

「positive」

nice - agreeable, pleasant, enjoyable, pleasing, pleasurable, good, comfortable, cozy, comfy, homely, delightful.

brave - bold, brave, courageous, fearless, valiant, gallant, braveness, nerve.

calm -  tranquility, quiet, peace, ease, quietness, quietly, peaceful, pacifist, pacific, passive, amicable.

gentle - kind, mild, soft, quiet, light, docile, smooth, tender, delicate, sensitive.

eager -  impatient, enthusiastic, anxious, overeager, raring,  longing, wishful, impatient.

happy -  glad, fortunate, blissful, joyous, delighted, contented, euphoric, cheerful, bright, cheery, beamish, jolly, lively.

obedient - submissive, compliant, docile, conformable, manipulable. 

proud - braggy, prideful, proud of overproud, boastful, immodest, chesty, arrogant, pleased, braggart.

relieved - alleviated, eased, glad, thankful.

silly - sappy, foolish, lightheaded, frivolous, airheaded, goofy, stupid, dumb.

victorious - triumphant, successful, prosperous, undefeated.

hungry - famished, starved, thirsty, dry.

clean - washed, unstained, tidy, dry-cleaned, fresh, scrubbed, water-washed, pure, purity, virginal, plain, unmixed, sheer, unadulterated, pureness.

「negative」

angry - maddened, enraged, ireful, angered, furious, choleric, infuriated, mad, nervous, stormy, livid, outraged, indignant, grumpy, fierce, violent.

panicky - worried, scary, scared, afraid, terrified, disturbed, frightned, afflicted, troubled, concerned.

bewildered - stunned, amazed, astonished, surprised, puzzled, perplexed, confused, dumbfounded, haunted.

clumsy -  clumsy, awkward, uncoordinated, graceless, inelegant, inept, maladroit, unskillful.

embarrassed - ashamed, mortfied, humiliated, sheepish, red-faced, blushing, blushful, discomposed, rosy.

repulsive - obnoxious, itchy, detestable, offensive, obscene, repugnant, hideous.

sad - sorrowful, bittersweet, melancholic, tragical, wistful, tragic, mournful, paiful, unhappy, distressing, upset, distressed

jealous - envious, overjealous.

thoughtless - unconsidered, inconsiderate, reckless, giddy, rash, sloppy, unwary, 

tense -  uptight, edgy, nervy, overstrung, highly strung, strained.

filthy - unclean, dirty, messy, putrid, stinking, grubby, squalid, nasty, disgusting, unpleasant, distasteful, decadent, indulgent, dusty.

dangerous - alarming, critical, fatal, formidable, malignant, menacing, mortal, nasty, perilous, precarious, pressing, serious, terrible, threatening, treacherous, urgent, damaging, deadly, death-defying, deathly, destructive, detrimental, harmful, hazardous, injurious, lethal, life-threatening, noxious, poisonous, risky, severe, toxic, unsafe, unstable, venomous.

⟨Sound Adjectives⟩ 

loud - deafening, noisy, screeching, thundering, hissing.

melodic - honeyed, melodious, sweetish, sweet.

quiet - voiceless, whispering, faint, inaudible, soft.

husky - raspy, gravelly, rough, scratchy, hoarse, thick.  

⟨Taste Adjectives⟩

bitter - tart.

delicious - fresh, greasy, nutritious, yummy.

hot - warm, heated, melted.

icy - cold, frozen.

rotten - burnt. 

salty - salted, briny, brackish, corned

strong -  vigorous, consistent, corpulent.

sweet - sugary, honeyed, dulcet, mellifluous, bland.

tasteless - insipid, flavorless, flavourless, vapid, flat.

⟨Quantity Adjectives⟩

abundant - many, numerous,  plentiful, ample, profuse, rich, generous, large, huge, great, overflowing, in plenty, in abundance.

full - filled, filled up, filled to capacity, filled to the brim, brimming, brimful, occupied.

empty - vacant, unoccupied, uninhabited, untenanted, bare, desolate, deserted, abandoned.

few - sparse,  a small number, a handful, one or two, a couple, two or three, not many, hardly any.

substantial - considerable, significant, important, notable, major, valuable.

⟨Time Adjectives⟩

ancient - old, advanced in years, up in years, long.

brief - quick, rapid, short, swift, fast, sudden, immediate, instant, instantaneous, abrupt, hasty, hurried.

early - untimely, premature, unseasonable, before time.

late - behind schedule, behind time, behindhand, tardy, running late, overdue, belated, delayed.

➥ Vocabulary Tips Masterlist

⟨if you have other adjectives that fit this topic, just send me a message.⟩

So, I don't know how to write pain like! What words do I use? how do I describe it! I really need some help here!

No problem! And sorry about not answering sooner, I was on vacation. To make it up to you, I’ve made one of my trademark Long Posts about it.

TIPS ON HOW TO WRITE PAIN (FOR BOTH ORIGINAL CONTENT WRITERS AND FANFICTION WRITERS)

When I first started writing, about eight years ago, I had the same issue as @imjustafuckinggirl.

How are you supposed to write about pain you’ve never experienced before???

The characters in my book suffer through all sorts of terrible shit, and in no way am I writing from experience, which is marginally easier to do than write about something that has never happened to you.

However, with time, I managed to gather up a few strategies on how to write pain.

1. Don’t Write Paragraphs About It

I know, it’s tempting. You want to convey to the reader just how much pain the character is in, and you think that the pain will be emphasized the more you write about it.

This, however, is a lie.

As a reader, when I’m reading a book or fanfiction where, whenever the writer uses agonizingly long paragraphs to describe when a character is hurt, I skip it.

Entirely.

It’s boring and, quite frankly, unnecessary, especially during a fight or huge battle, which are supposed to be fast-paced.

When it comes to writing about pain, it really is about quality and not quantity.

In my own writing, I stick to short, quick paragraphs, some of them which are barely a line long. This gives it a faster pace and sort of parallels with the scattered, spread out thoughts of the character as they suffer.

2. Describe it Right

Many times, usually in fanfiction, writers over-exaggerate certain injuries.

This partially has to do with the fact that they’ve never experienced that injury before and are just thinking about what it might feel like.

As a girl with two brothers and who often participated in rough play-fights, I can assure you that getting punched is not as painful as you think it is.

(However, it does depend on the area, as well as how hard the punch is, on top of the fact that you have to take into account whether or not the punch broke bones)

I’m reading a high school AU where a character gets punched by a bully (Idk where they got punched it wasn’t stated) and the author is describing it like they’d been shot.

It was to the point where I was like Did the bully have brass knuckles or something????

It was very clear that this author had never been punched before.

When describing the pain of an injury or the injury itself, you have to take into account:

- What object was used to harm the character

- Where the injury is

- How long the character has had the injury

- (For blades) How deep the cut is

- (For blunt force trauma) How hard the hit was

- Whether or not the wound triggers other things (Ex: Concussion, vomiting, dizziness, infection, internal/external bleeding).

There’s also the fact that when some authors described wounds caused by blades such as knives, daggers, and swords, they never take into account the anatomy of a person and which places cause the most blood flow.

Obviously, a cut on your cheek will have less of a blood flow than a cut on your wrist, depending on what the blade hits, and I hope that everyone consults a diagram of veins, capillaries, arteries, etc. when they’re describing blood flow from a certain place.

There’s also the fact that you have to take into account where the blood is coming from. Veins? Arteries?

The blood from arteries will be a brighter red, like vermilion, than the blood from veins, which is the dark crimson everyone likes to talk about.

Not all places gush bright red blood, people!

3. DIFFERENT INJURIES HAVE DIFFERENT KINDS OF PAIN

Here, let me explain.

A punch feels different from a slap.

A broken arm feels different from getting stabbed.

A fall feels different from a dog bite.

I’ll give you a list of all the kinds of things that can be described for the three most common kinds of injuries that happen in stories:

Punch/Blunt Force Trauma

How it feels:

- Aching

- Numbness (In the later stages)

- A single spike of pain before it fades into an ache

- Throbbing

Effects:

- Vomiting (If the character is punched in the gut)

- Swelling

- Bruising

- Broken bones

- Unconsciousness (Blow to the head)

- Dizziness (Blow to the head)

- Concussion (Also a blow to the head)

- Internal bleeding

- Death (In the case of concussions and internal bleeding and broken bones- ribs can pierce lungs)

Stab Wound/Cut

How it feels:

- Stinging (only shallow wounds have just stinging)

- Burning

- With stab wounds, I feel like describing the effects of it make it more powerfully felt by the reader

Effects:

- Bleeding (Consult chart of the circulatory system beforehand for the amount of blood flow that should be described and what color the blood should be)

- Dizziness (Heavy blood loss)

- Unconsciousness

- Infection (if left unattended)

- Death

Gunshot

How it feels:

- Depends on the caliber bullet, from how far away they were shot (point-blank range is nothing like being shot from a distance), and in what place. Do careful research and then make your decision.

Effects:

- Bleeding(Consult chart of the circulatory system beforehand for the amount of blood flow that should be described and what color the blood should be. Also take into effect the above variables for blood flow as well.)

- Dizziness (Heavy blood loss)

- Infection (if left unattended)

- Death

Some things that a character may do while they’re injured:

- Heavy/Harsh/Ragged breathing

- Panting

- Making noises of pain

gasping

grunting

hissing

groaning

whimpering

yelping (when the injury is inflicted)

screaming

shrieking

wailing

- Crying/ Weeping/Sobbing/Etc.

- Clenching their teeth

- Unable to speak

- Pressing their hands against a stab wound/cut to try and stem the bleeding

- Eyesight going out of whack (vision blurring and tilting, the room spinning, black spots consuming sight)

- Eyes rolling up into their head

- Trembling/shaking

- Ears riniging (from gunshot)

HOPE THIS HELPED!

First of all, I am SHOOK that there are people who still haven't read the manga. Do it (you don't have to). Second, I believe that incorrect information was planted on purpose because WHO THE FUCK RECRUITS A KID???

Fun FMA manga fact:

This isn’t mentioned in Brotherhood, but the reason Roy and Riza came to Resembool scouting out the Elrics is because someone fucked up the ages on Ed and Al’s file.

Literally Roy and Riza are riding in the back of some horse-drawn carriage into Resembool chatting with the driver like “yes we’ve heard rumors of two alchemist brothers here, Ed and Al Elric ages 31 and 30 respectively. Do you know where they live?” And the driver pretty much answers with “lol what? Those kids are like 10.”

Except now Roy and Riza are already THERE so they decide “Fuck it. Let’s pay a visit anyway.”

So everything that went down in the series is thanks to some mysterious fuck up in the Amestrian Intelligence Department and I salute that person.

Imagine mental illness and 'disability' in a fantasy setting:

• An Obsessive Compulsive Disorder sufferer that can fight off magic such as mind control and false mental images, because of living with intrusive thoughts for so long.

• An anxiety sufferer who is hyperalert and can hear/see an attacker before anyone else.

• A person with synaethesia who can tell a person’s intentions by the colour of their words. (It’s not technically a disability but I thought it was interesting to include!)

• A person with DID/MPD who’s alters help disguise them from the people tracking them down (by not acting as the other person would, a physical disguise would still be needed!)

• A deaf/Hard of Hearing person who’s immune to sirens and magical suggestion. (Turns out some magic only works when you hear it!)

Feel free to add more! (You can also include LGBT and neurodivergence if you like!)