Trying To Look Back And Add/fix Some Writing For The Coffee Because I've Gotten Better At Characterization.

Trying to look back and add/fix some writing for The Coffee because I've gotten better at characterization.

Probably gonna fix the first chapter since it comes off as preachy and I feel like Sylvia would be more worried about Wander leaving the "happy to be single" club over him screwing up a relationship; she KNOWS those two are obsessed with each other. Also gonna dial back on the whole "Wander being downtrodden" to make him worried about the cut contact instead.

Other stuff to note about the series since I'm probably not gonna go back and rewrite old episodes (at least for a while):

- Female Watchdogs have apparently always existed on the ship, so that whole equality segment is trashed

- Hater's backstory changed a bit; the ID number name he had isn't accurate anymore since NASA chimps were named before launch. I'm keeping the whole "remembering being a chimpanzee" thing but I'm going to make it so that it's a lot blurrier for him and he just can't remember/doesn't like his old name.

- Any attempt at a play on words like a "kerson/keyson" in the first chapter is something I hope people completely disregard because it sucks... Sorry!

- Similar apologies for any preachy bullshit, I've gotta get better at the whole "show don't tell" thing

- Any future installment after The Coffee will be posted all at once instead of chapter-by-chapter because I tried that again for this installment and it's been a disaster.

Thank you for being patient with me! I'll try to get writing out as soon as I can, I've just been dealing with some sudden family deaths/depression. I'll post again soon! ;)

I've realized something as of late . . . . Whenever RW artists depict vultures, they almost always neglect to show these weird side bulbs that vultures have in front of their wings? Looking at Joar's concept art, it seems their an attachment point, and the wings protrude out from the back end of them in some way. I feel like I'm the only one who's acknowledged it, have you noticed this too?

That is interesting! I have not drawn vultures, so I didn't take a good look at them yet. I always like looking at these sketches for inspiration on design, though it's also good to remember that Joar's concept sketches aren't the be-all-end-all of creature's "true" designs. In the end, in-game sprites is where everyone is basing from, and there's freedom to re-interpret.

Alright, I was right to initially think there were no female watchdogs on the ship, that's still canon to the story now!

Referring to the comment I made on this post; Peepers has been proven to not be very sexist if at all, but he's not technically in charge. Hater is.

Even if he is the one deciding who gets let in, he still doesn't hire women because of Hater! It's not their fault, he just doesn't want Hater to be anymore distracted

"calm down son its just a drawing" no because I wont stand for this slander

original tweets from Craig

My stupid ass overthinking this because it made no sense to me

today in "google AI is fucking useless because it hallucinates things that never happened", i bought a couple CVS thermometers that have both been acting up, tried to search if there had been a problem with the whole product line:

there is no record of this product recall. it did not happen. the date "feb 8 2024" is the date someone listed a thermometer for sale on ebay.

This is potentially life saving information everyone should know.