IF I SEE THIS ONE MORE FKING TIME UGGGH
IF I SEE THIS ONE MORE FKING TIME UGGGH
the phrase:
" (xyz) left little to the imagination" DOES NOT REFER TO MODEST OR NON REVEALING CLOTHING
IT IS THE OPPOSITE.
IT MEANS. LITTLE TO IMAGINE, BECAUSE YOU CAN SEE
ALLLLL OF IT
LINGERIE LEAVES LITTLE TO THE IMAGINATION
A SWEATER DOES NOT.
STOP MIXING THEM UP 😤
thanks xo
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IF I SEE THIS AGAIN I'LL DIE pt 2
so writing is a learned skill, and it's good practice. but, I see a lot of the same mistakes that just hnnnngh make me wanna hit something (love you guys but hooo boy).
basic vocab. it's not hard to google a thesaurus or whatever to enhance the writing, cause when i've read 'chuckled, smirked, rolled his eyes' more than five times in a fic, we're doing something wrong. really dig in deep with it.
WHO DECIDED ON ORBS. WHICH ONE OF YOU MOTHERFUCKERS THOUGHT 'ORBS' WAS AN APPROPRIATE SUBSITITUTE FOR EYES. i just wanna talk, man. but seriously. quick note on eye anatomy: Pupil - the black dot that gets bigger (dilates) or constricts (gets smaller). Iris - the colored bit. If you don't wanna say 'their blue eyes' again and again, try this: blue gaze, blue stare, blue irises, use different shades of blue....(or whatever color)
Appendage. why? why that word? Squelch. again. why? not sexy. 0/10. stop. just stop. member. like no. what are we, a trashy romance novel? gross.
LMAO this makes me laugh. every time. (a little bit nsfw but not really just an allusion to). "eats (x) out like a man starved." IT COMES UP EVERY TIME. EVERYYYYYY TIMEEEE AHAHAHAHAHA. stop, it's not even hot anymore i just get a tummy ache from laughing. idk why that's become the catchphrase for munching but maybe chill.
part 3 soon xox
writing tips - eyeballs!
our favorite woohoo
Sooooo.....coupla things to start.
No orbs. NO ORBS. bad, stupid, dumb, disgusting, gross. orbs is weird. stop using it
eyes are really cool and have a lot of cool emotion. use them more! not just 'heart eyes' and 'tears'. there's other cool stuff.
ANATOMY
Eyes have three visible parts: sclera (whitish part) Pupil (black thing in the middle) and the iris (colored bit).
Pupils dilate and constrict. irises do not. stop mixing them up. Another thing: Dilate means to grow larger, constrict means to shrink.
When would your pupil be dilated?
Lust
Happiness
Dark environments (that's why ur eyes look sparkly when you look at the stars! v cute)
cocaine or other stimulants (does not dilate with weed or booze, but may look glassy.)
When would the pupil be constricted?
head injury
bright light
seizure
fear
DESCRIPTION
yall know how i feel about orbs. But if you feel like you're running out of vocab or that it seems cliche, think about this stuff:
Eyes are windows to the soul. Use describing the eyes as a vessel to show emotion. don't just say what they look like. Show don't tell blah blah blah. Example
Not great:
His eyes were glassy with tears, lashes sticking from the moisture. He couldn't look them in the eye, too wrought with grief.
yeah, okay, whatever. meh.
better:
The light was extinguished behind his eyes. Grief had dulled his gaze to a muddy grey, no longer sparkling with curiosity. Tears clung his lashes together and blurred the sadness spilling from his cheeks.
Thereee we go, that's some good shit.
Alright, go away now xox
words to use instead of ________
"Mad"
aggravated, angry, annoyed, boiling, cross, enraged, exasperated, fuming, furious, heated, incensed, indignant, irate, irritable, livid, offended, outraged, riled, steamed, storming, upset
"Nice"
amiable, charming, cordial, courteous, delightful, favorable, friendly, genial, gentle, gracious, helpful. inviting, kind, lovely, obliging, peaceful, peachy, pleasant, polite, swell, sympathetic, tender, welcoming, well-mannered, winning
"Pretty"
alluring, appealing, attractive, beautiful, charming, cute, delightful, desirable, elegant, eye-catching, fair, fascinating, gorgeous, graceful, intriguing, lovely, pleasing, striking, stunning, sweet
"Said"
alleged, argued, asked, asserted, babbled, bellowed, bragged, commented, complained, cried, declined, demanded, denied, encouraged, expressed, giggled, growled, inquired, moaned, nagged, rebuked, rebutted, replied, rejected, retorted, roared, scolded, shrieked, shrugged, stated, taunted, vowed, warned, whined, whispered, yelled
"Went"
avoid, bolt, bound, depart, exit, escape, flee, fly, hike, hop, jaunt, jolt, journey, leap, leave, lurch, march, mosey, move, pace, parade, pass, progress, retreat, saunter, scoot, skip, split, step, stride, stroll, tour, travel, vanish
more words to use instead other words to use instead another list of words to use instead
Writing tips! pt. 1
Fluff advice
Use fluffy words. I mean like softy words, not a lot of hard endings or consonants. words that feel soft, you feel me? (I am autistic so maybe just me but lemme show you some examples and definitions)
snuffle
tuck
coo
murmur
mumble
smush/squish
bundle
soft (obv)
gentle
nuzzle
burrow
you feel me??? does it make sense?? as opposed to 'cuddle, mutter, smash, wrap' which mean essentially the same as above. If you use words that feel or sound phonetically like the vibe you're trying to get across, it reads much better. Paragraph example of a generic fluff scene (G rated dw) using themed words and non-themed words.
Theme:
warm cotton sheets and syrupy midday sunlight draped gently over the entwined forms on their shared bed. a hazy, drowsy blanket of pleasure made their eyelids heavy. feeling too far away, (A) shuffled closer to (B), nudging their nose into the soft space of their cheek. B murmured sweetly, caressing A back to sleep. smushed a close as can be, the two lovers drifted into a cozy pocket of love
No Theme:
warm cotton sheets and bright midday sun shone through the window over the entwined forms. sleeping soundly, wrapped in their love for each other, the day crept forward. (A) yawned and rolled closer to (B), wedging their nose into (B's) soft cheek. (B) chuckled, whispering their partner back to the safe world of sleep. together again, the two lovers drifted into dreamland.
Difference? or just me?
In other words, think of small children when you think of fluff. (NOT LIKE THAT) the tone, the softness you would approach a toddler with. toddler speech is kinda soft too, since they aren't capable of hard sounds with their teeth (or lack thereof) so their words sound sweeter. (an' instead of and, 'bubba' instead of 'papa', you get the idea). Adults also change words to fit a softer, gentler mood. "Lovey' instead of love, 'Doggy,' instead of 'dog'. this same vocabulary shift can add another layer of cuteness to ur fic.
Hope this helps! message w more questions xx