Hi,

Hi,

I was wondering if any Rise fans could beta read this Leosagi fic. It’s short and incomplete, but I’m working on rewriting it soon. The purpose for me asking for a beta-reader is to see how I can improve on my writing based on narrative, grammar, or any issues that stand out. I would like good and bad feedback so I am sure on what I need to improve and what I am at least pretty good at.

I’m going to put the story link in the comments since Tumblr wont allow me to add it to the post.

Thank you!

Content OH Characters Would Make As Youtubers or Social Media Influencers 

Luz Noceda: Boiling Isles Vlogs & TV/Movie/Book Reviews 

Amity Blight: Building(Inventions) Videos & Occasional Advice Videos for Kids with A**sive Parents 

Willow Park: (First Time) Trying Human World Sports & Educational Plant Videos(What They Are & How to Care for Them) 

Gus Porter: Human World Vlogs & (First Time) Trying Human Stuff (Food, Events, etc)

Hunter: Carving Videos(Palismen, Objects, Statues) 

Eda Clawthorne: Posts whatever and whenever she wants 

King Clawthorne: Supernatural(visiting haunted places) Videos, Solving Unsolved Mystery Videos, & Video Game Playthroughs 

Hooty: Bug Reviews(Rating How Delicious They Are)

*Subscribers theorize whether he’s an animatronic/puppet. A lot of curse memes are made*

Lilith Clawthorne: Architectural, Facts About the Boiling Isles, & Learning Human History Videos

Raine Whispers: Music Reaction/Reviews & Vocal Coach Videos 

Camila Noceda: How To Care For Your Pet & Advice for Parents with LGBTQ+ Children (ft Luz) Videos

Vee Noceda: Cosplay & Makeup Videos 

Alador Blight: Engineering & Human Invention Reviews(+ How to Improve Them) ft Amity, Emira & Edric

Darius Deamonne: Fashion Review & Sewing Videos

Emira Blight: Prank w/ Edric & Makeup Videos

Edric Blight: Prank w/ Emira & Human World Animal Reaction(Watching funny, cute videos & helping Camila at the Vet) 

The Collector: Traveling Videos & Video Game Playthroughs w/ King 

Mattholomule: Construction & Illusion Prank w/ Gus Videos 

Masha: Scary Story Reaction & True Crime Videos 

How I Would Write Kronika As MK1's Villain?

During the period when the first 20 minutes of gameplay came out, I thought Kronika might be the villain. I was mixed about the idea because I was nervous that the writers might fumble her writing like in MK11, but I had some hope that she could improve. Plus, her new design is a massive improvement compared to her previous one and it kind of sucks that her character is just a disguise. I really wanted MK to have a well-written female main villain.

Overall, I enjoyed the ending we got but the multiverse idea seems a bit too much. I would've preferred Liu Kang's and Shang Tsung's timelines to be the only ones that exist since, in canon, they were in Titan status in MK11 Aftermath. But, MK1's ending does not make me hate the game or the franchise. I'm still invested in it.

Anyway, this is my idea: (I really like the setup/base of the story so most of my changes are minor except for the final battle.)

Instead of MK11 Shang Tsung disguising as Kronika, Kronika would disguise herself as a high priest called Damashi, who is connected to Outworld's royal family. She plots with Shang Tsung and Quan Chi on how to overthrow the kingdom and rule the realms (a lie). To keep Geras convinced that Kronika is dead, Kronika wiped the knowledge of her having a failsafe plan to become a mortal if she is near death. As Damashi, I’d have her appear throughout the story but in the background and for only a few moments, watching the events unfold, to hint that something is wrong. Shang Tsung is still very manipulated and is the cause of General Shao, Rain, and Reiko betraying the royal family.

When Shang Tsung introduces “Damashi,” it will be Kronika in her true form instead of Titan Shang Tsung. She would berate Liu Kang and his timeline, saying that balance is the true way to create a timeline. Liu Kang argues that giving people free will to be good instead of taking away that choice is the right thing to do. Kronika then reveals that she created another failsafe within Geras- if she ever loses her Titan powers then she can steal Geras’. She extracts his powers, reverting him back to his MK 11 self. Geras' corruption causes the Hourglass to break, slowly destroying Liu Kang's timeline. Some of the characters start dissolving/disappearing so this leaves Liu Kang on his own. He travels to the Hourglass and the final fight starts with Kronika as the main fighter and Geras as her Kameo. If Liu Kang does damage to Kronika, it causes her life bar to steadily increase. Instead, Liu Kang would have to hit Geras, who is much weaker since Kronika absorbed most of his powers. The player would have to wait for Geras to appear on stage while avoiding Kronika's attacks. Kronika is defeated and Geras is healed. Out of wanting to properly protect the timeline, Liu Kang decides to reabsorb his Titan powers.

I intended this to be a parallel/comparison between Liu Kang and Kronika’s ideals on how a timeline should be and their treatment of Geras. While Kronika believes balance is the best way to handle a timeline and treats Geras like a servant/tool, Liu Kang believes people are more capable of good and sees Geras as a friend.

I really wanted MK1 to focus more on Liu Kang's struggles with being a Titan and Earthrealm's protector, such as making sure the timeline gives all or at least most people the free will to choose their destiny, his melancholy with not being with his friends like in previous timelines, and seeing them die in the future.

Do You Think (Future) Casey Jones is Cassandra’s Kid?

It’s been revealed that the mysterious stranger from the future will be a male Casey Jones, and ever since I’ve been wondering how this will be incorporated into the story when Rise already has Cassandra/FR. There has been talk that the creators were retconning the reveal, but there was a recent that said otherwise. So, I’m wondering if future Casey is Cassandra’s son (hopefully with April; I’ve shipped them for a while) but she passed away and Leo named him after her. I can’t really think of another reason why he is named Casey other than that. If any of you have other theories, lmk. I like discussing with other fans.

Owl House S3 Episodes Ranking(Most to Least Fav)

I loved season 3 and think the crew did an amazing job wrapping the story nicely while only have 3 episodes. I have so much respect for them. I’m asking this question out of curiosity, not to disrespect the hard work done.

My ranking:

Watching & Dreaming

This finale is one of my favorites of all time. The Collector got really good development, Luz’s sacrifice and Titan form, the animation was beautiful, and pretty much every scene brought something beautiful. The fight scenes were amazingly animated and thrilling to watch. Belos’ death was so satisfying and watching him get stomped to death was somehow pretty funny. The post-credit was super cute and I liked the way the characters said bye to the audience through the Collector. The King-ceañera was sweet because I remember hearing that S3 would’ve had an episode with Luz celebrating her quinceañera. It’s sad that the episode didn’t happen but I’m glad it was included into the finale.

Thanks to Them

Luz and Hunter carried this episode for me. I really connected with them and their struggles- mental health struggles. Seeing Camila get more spotlight was great. She’s an amazing mom! The montage of what the crew was doing in the Human realm was cute and kind of bittersweet because these scenes could’ve been made into episodes, especially with Hunter questioning his identity. I liked seeing Vee again and her new human look is adorable. Flapjack’s death always makes me tear up. He was my favorite palisman so it made his sacrifice hurt more. I’m glad Belos got his retribution for all the pain he caused.

For the Future

I enjoyed this episode. Seeing everyone (Matt, Emira and Eldric, and Boscha) was great. I was happy to see Willow get some spotlight since she was pushed back for the past few episodes. I relate to her anxiety on having to keeping things together and trying to always be reliable. Hunter developing powers was great(he has a part of Flapjack left). The Huntlow moments were adorable; they are my second favorite ship and seeing them grow closer was so cute. Seeing Luz resolve her issues was great and her palisman is adorable.

The only thing that drops this episode down my ranking is the inclusion of Kikimora. Personally, I don’t care enough for Kikimora that I would want her to come back. I would’ve been fine with her last scene being in the S2 finale. I understand that she was a secondary character to Boscha’s development, but I don’t care about Boscha that much to say that Kikimora coming back was worth it. I think it bothers me because we spent a good chunk of that episode focusing on Boscha and Kikimora that the episode felt stagnant at moments. I would’ve preferred The Collector having more screen time. This issue doesn’t make me hate the episode, but it is my least favorite S3 episode.

To my non-artists Rise fans, have you ever felt so annoyed that you couldn’t draw what you envision in your mind? 

I’m feeling it right now. I want to draw my Rise versions of TMNT characters like Usagi, Mona Lisa, and Leatherhead so badly but I can’t draw to save my life- let alone in Rise style. 

Also, I have this fun weapon idea for Future April where she has two titanium bats for close range fighting and they transform into guns- one is a shot gun and the other is a sniper. The grip of the bat would bend for the bullet chambers and the knob would have the trigger. The other end of the bat would open for the bullets to fire. There would also be a slit where the scope would pop out.

Of course, Donnie built it for her.

(I’m just so bummed that I can’t draw and too poor to ask for a commission to be.